Someone want to read one paragraph from my story? I just want some opinions (be constructive!)?
I just picked a random paragraph, try to be polite!
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The flight over was rather soothing. It was a nice calm flight, Mick and I didn't talk much though. I had the window seat and watched the ground with intrest. It was amazing how small the land looked. It was like a quilt, actually. Different colored squares. It was truely beautiful.
When we landed in the Akron-Canton Airport in Ohio, we had to wait an hour for our next flight. Then, as soon as we boarded, we waited a couple hours or so until we landed in the Chicago O'Hare Airport, we headed straight for our luggage.
"That wasn't so bad was it?" Mick asked, breaking the silence. I shrugged.
"Peanuts were nasty." I stated causally and he laughed, making me smile.
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What do you think? ^_^
(sorry if there are any spelling mistakes, I'm either a fast typer, or a bad speller, heehee)
There were a few mistakes but I really liked it. I liked the last part about the peanuts, hilarious. It brought a smile to my face, thanks 
Keep writing and have fun!
Good luck!!!
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